My first review so I'll see how well I can review it.
I agree as said before that the snare and kick should have been clearer in the track, however, this does not make it a bad track.
I think to help with this issue you could have either used a different snare / kick plugin or maybe tweaked the EQ a little in favor of the snare and kick.
The melody hits pretty hard in this one for me. It reminds me of video game music which I enjoy listening to. It makes me think of a stage leading up to a boss battle.
This track shows potential and I think it could have been a little longer (maybe up to 2:30 or 3:00).
Overall I would say this is a decent track. Everything is clear just the snare and kick needs that little extra.